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“Don’t leave me. Please,” he begged.

I sighed. “I have to. I don’t even know what I’m doing…”

“No one does, that’s the point! It’s a learning experience, and honey, you’re losing.”

“I’ve barely even done anything!”

“And that’s the problem. You can’t give up now! If you do, I’ll….”

“You’ll what?”

“I’ll ruin my life.”

“Uh-huh.”

“I’m serious. Without you, I’m nothing.”

“You’ll be fine, Luke.”

“No, I won’t. I’ll become an alcoholic.”

“Sure you will.”

“And I’ll sleep with tons of women.”

“Not my problem.”

“And…I’ll…become an angry cat lady.”

“You’d need to be a woman for that.”

He pouted, grabbing my abandoned pencil and throwing it across the table at me.

“Hey, that hurt!” I whined, snatching it out of his reach.

He paused, his eyes unmoving, the anger subsiding beneath them until all that was left was a dimmed star and a sadness I knew I would never comprehend.

“What?”

“Nothing.” His grin faded, and I felt a draft sweep between us, though the window was closed. “Just tell me one thing…If you stop, what will happen to me?”

“I…I don’t know.”

“Yes, you do. Writers don’t create characters, they create people. If you stop writing, I’ll die.”

“That’s not—”

That’s not true dissolved on my lips. That’s when he stood up and walked away, waiting for me to follow, for the moment when he would hear my footsteps and feel that comforting rush of relief.

But I didn’t know if I would.

A voice in my head whispered, Coward and Failure, and other lies that left the metallic taste of blood in my mouth.

I pushed the chair back, slowly, letting the feet scrape against the wood floors. Without looking back, I stumbled to catch up with him.

When I did, he smiled. And it was that smile that made me want to stay.
"When writing a novel a writer should create living people; people not characters. A character is a caricature." ~Ernest Hemingway

I hate the feeling of wanting to write something, but not having enough inspiration to do it. There's always that little voice that says you're useless and won't accomplish anything...

But sometimes, it's wrong.


4/26/14: I added a few things.

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QQI25 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this so much. It's amazing. 
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Student General Artist
You have no idea how happy I am to hear (read) that! :hug:
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QQI25 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2014  Student General Artist
:glomp:
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QQI25 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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BluishShimmer Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*chuckles* Ah the lack of confidence I know this to well. XD (I just wish my character would figure out who he wanted to be instead of taking on multiple identities -.- XD) Anyway thanks for sharing I really enjoyed it. :D
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014  Student General Artist
Yeah, it would be nice if characters could figure out their lives by themselves instead of relying on us lazy writers. :D

You're welcome! Thanks for commenting; I'm happy that you liked it. :)
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RoyMowz Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoyed this. And it especially hit home for me because (despite how strange it sounds) I have conversations with my characters all the time. Very well done. :D
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm happy that you liked it! :D Hahaha I do too (it's totally not weird!) 
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FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my gosh, you don't even know how much I love this! This is great because it reminds me so much of my favorite character in one of my books - his name is Logan - and that might mostly be because of the cat lady part (he has this very odd obsession over cats XD). It's wonderful, and it evokes feelings from a very much fictional character that feels real, because, to us, to the writers, even to the readers, our characters are real, and I think that's the best part. You have done a wonderful job with this! And for that, I congratulate you. :)
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Asterlia Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Student General Artist
For some reason, I find it oddly adorable when guys like cats. I just think it's a cute trait to have. :D
I completely agree; I think it's better to think of characters as real people rather than just characters because it makes it easier for the reader to connect with the characters and the emotions they are feeling. Sometimes though, characters are so poorly written that they make very unrealistic people. ^^

Thank youuuuu! I'm so glad you like this! :glomp:
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FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree completely, haha! :meow:
I know what you mean! But when writers can create realistic characters, those are the best writers!

You're so very welcome! :D
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Asterlia Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Student General Artist
Hahaha definitely! :D

heehee :meow:
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DanikaMilles Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I like this a lot. I always feel really attached to my characters and there is this need to tell their story, but sometimes I get writer's block or feel lazy and feel the same as you do.

I know this was in the critique folder of the group, but I honestly have nothing to say....I do not think I have anything to add to this. It seems good the way it is. However, if you would like I could ask my friend to read it and see what she thinks. She is much better at critiques than I am.

Good luck with your writing!
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm actually the opposite. I hardly get attached to my characters for some reason. Luke (the character referred to in this piece) is the first one I've actually felt connected to, like he was a real person and I couldn't just throw him away.

It's okay! I totally understand. I'm not very good at critiquing things either and I always feel guilty about it. You can ask your friend if you would like to, but don't feel bad about this critique. I greatly appreciate the feedback you've given me! :hug:

Thanks! Good luck to you as well :)
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DanikaMilles Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Well I am glad you got to experience having an attachment to a character. It is a very interesting feeling.

Anyways, I will bring it by my friend and see if she would give your deviation a read.

You're welcome and thank you! :)
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Lunzsopara Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
I really really enjoy this, it's amazing c:
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Student General Artist
Awww thank you! :hug: I'm so happy you enjoyed it!
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Lunzsopara Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
It's very well written! ^-^
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:iconasterlia:
Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Student General Artist
Thanks! You are so sweet :)
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Lunzsopara Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
^-^
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dtb84 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014   Writer

This is a very good piece.

 

If I was gonna offer any sort of critique it would be to lengthen it with descriptive details about the room they are in.

I understand that it’s possibly lacking more details as part of its “Lazy Writer” character. But, descriptive details aren’t just only used to paint a scene. They also offer the reader a chance to let the ideas and thoughts set in their mind.

At least it’s something to consider.

 

Also, is this the first character abandoned by the writer? Is there a graveyard out back, through a window that crumpled up papers have been tossed out?

 

As I said, this piece by itself is very good, quite enjoyable and doesn’t really need to be changed much to remain good. But I feel there is the possibility for a longer bit of writing that can remain as a quick enjoyable ready, but with more of itself in it.

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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you very much!

Yeah, I could probably lengthen it and make it more descriptive, but I intended this to be a quick scene to mimic the style of the argument. To me, I feel like the words that were spoken were more important than the setting, so that's why I didn't include much description, though I agree that it could have used more.

Nope, this writer has abandoned plenty of characters before, but this character is the first that they actually grew attached to. :)

Again, thanks for the feedback! I appreciate it :hug:
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starlightt1234 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
it's sad how even after this i'm STILL too lazy to write.
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Student General Artist
hehehe same here! Pat pat 
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Bibliosmith Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Professional Writer
Amen.
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student General Artist
:meow:
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SpottedZebra1 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
Oh God now I'm going to start feeling protective over book characters. D:
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student General Artist
hehehe :D
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aw this is brilliant, I think you wrote such a great piece about the relationship between not only writer, but also artist and character - they do turn into their own people, and abandoning them seems wrong - they also have a way of dragging you back, it's so weird. 
My favourite part was the threats to be come an alcoholic and crazy cat-lady - that's right, throw a tantrum over it
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Bludragon123 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
IKR.
I loved the crazy cat lady part too :)
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lol no offence meant to crazy cat ladies of course
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Bludragon123 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hahaha. Yeah
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student General Artist
Aww thank you so much! I appreciate the feedback! :D

Hahaha yes, threatening the writer is always a good way to get them back on track ^^
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome!

with me its usually the opposite way around - with me threatening the characters...I have a "Pit of Discontent" for the very purpose XD
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student General Artist
Really? That's hilarious. ^^
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes it's true,  mostly when I can't draw them right
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nicoleblakk Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student Filmographer
wow!! this is amazing and emotional..
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you! :hug:
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nicoleblakk Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student Filmographer
welcome
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Supach Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like it ,enjoyed  this novel idea :clap:
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm glad :)
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weekendhunters Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Good piece.
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:iconasterlia:
Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you :)
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K-Kendall Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is something I can see happening, as its quite common that I talk to my characters.
My babys need to stop sassying me!
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student General Artist
I do too sometimes. hehehe you just have to keep writing then! :)
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's even worse when you give your characters names!
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student General Artist
True :)
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SincaraDain Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this work. :) I also fully agree, characters can only stay alive in a world that has been finished. If you leave half way through the process the world and the characters will collapse back into nothingness.

It is a great way to motivate yourself and IŽll try to keep it in mind.
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm glad you liked it! :) 
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