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“Don’t leave me. Please,” he begged.

I sighed. “I have to. I don’t even know what I’m doing…”

“No one does, that’s the point! It’s a learning experience, and honey, you’re losing.”

“I’ve barely even done anything!”

“And that’s the problem. You can’t give up now! If you do, I’ll….”

“You’ll what?”

“I’ll ruin my life.”


“I’m serious. Without you, I’m nothing.”

“You’ll be fine, Luke.”

“No, I won’t. I’ll become an alcoholic.”

“Sure you will.”

“And I’ll sleep with tons of women.”

“Not my problem.”

“And…I’ll…become an angry cat lady.”

“You’d need to be a woman for that.”

He pouted, grabbing my abandoned pencil and throwing it across the table at me.

“Hey, that hurt!” I whined, snatching it out of his reach.

He paused, his eyes unmoving, the anger subsiding beneath them until all that was left was a dimmed star and a sadness I knew I would never comprehend.


“Nothing.” His grin faded, and I felt a draft sweep between us, though the window was closed. “Just tell me one thing…If you stop, what will happen to me?”

“I…I don’t know.”

“Yes, you do. Writers don’t create characters, they create people. If you stop writing, I’ll die.”

“That’s not—”

That’s not true dissolved on my lips. That’s when he stood up and walked away, waiting for me to follow, for the moment when he would hear my footsteps and feel that comforting rush of relief.

But I didn’t know if I would.

A voice in my head whispered, Coward and Failure, and other lies that left the metallic taste of blood in my mouth.

I pushed the chair back, slowly, letting the feet scrape against the wood floors. Without looking back, I stumbled to catch up with him.

When I did, he smiled. And it was that smile that made me want to stay.
"When writing a novel a writer should create living people; people not characters. A character is a caricature." ~Ernest Hemingway

I hate the feeling of wanting to write something, but not having enough inspiration to do it. There's always that little voice that says you're useless and won't accomplish anything...

But sometimes, it's wrong.

4/26/14: I added a few things.

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BluishShimmer Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*chuckles* Ah the lack of confidence I know this to well. XD (I just wish my character would figure out who he wanted to be instead of taking on multiple identities -.- XD) Anyway thanks for sharing I really enjoyed it. :D
Asterlia Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014  Student General Artist
Yeah, it would be nice if characters could figure out their lives by themselves instead of relying on us lazy writers. :D

You're welcome! Thanks for commenting; I'm happy that you liked it. :)
RoyMowz Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoyed this. And it especially hit home for me because (despite how strange it sounds) I have conversations with my characters all the time. Very well done. :D
Asterlia Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm happy that you liked it! :D Hahaha I do too (it's totally not weird!) 
FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my gosh, you don't even know how much I love this! This is great because it reminds me so much of my favorite character in one of my books - his name is Logan - and that might mostly be because of the cat lady part (he has this very odd obsession over cats XD). It's wonderful, and it evokes feelings from a very much fictional character that feels real, because, to us, to the writers, even to the readers, our characters are real, and I think that's the best part. You have done a wonderful job with this! And for that, I congratulate you. :)
Asterlia Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Student General Artist
For some reason, I find it oddly adorable when guys like cats. I just think it's a cute trait to have. :D
I completely agree; I think it's better to think of characters as real people rather than just characters because it makes it easier for the reader to connect with the characters and the emotions they are feeling. Sometimes though, characters are so poorly written that they make very unrealistic people. ^^

Thank youuuuu! I'm so glad you like this! :glomp:
FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree completely, haha! :meow:
I know what you mean! But when writers can create realistic characters, those are the best writers!

You're so very welcome! :D
Asterlia Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Student General Artist
Hahaha definitely! :D

heehee :meow:
DanikaMilles Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I like this a lot. I always feel really attached to my characters and there is this need to tell their story, but sometimes I get writer's block or feel lazy and feel the same as you do.

I know this was in the critique folder of the group, but I honestly have nothing to say....I do not think I have anything to add to this. It seems good the way it is. However, if you would like I could ask my friend to read it and see what she thinks. She is much better at critiques than I am.

Good luck with your writing!
Asterlia Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm actually the opposite. I hardly get attached to my characters for some reason. Luke (the character referred to in this piece) is the first one I've actually felt connected to, like he was a real person and I couldn't just throw him away.

It's okay! I totally understand. I'm not very good at critiquing things either and I always feel guilty about it. You can ask your friend if you would like to, but don't feel bad about this critique. I greatly appreciate the feedback you've given me! :hug:

Thanks! Good luck to you as well :)
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